Monday, July 6, 2009

The UndyingLove

The Shattered Dreams
CHARACTER 1:
Wow!! It feels so good, I have heard time and again people saying that it feels really good when you come back to your birth place after so many years. It is indeed such a lovely feeling, It looks like the pages are turning back and all of sudden I am placed back into my Yesteryear's, back into my childhood. Six years back my Dad got transferred to Delhi, and so we had to move to Delhi, Leaving my loving and beautiful Goa behind. Then three years back I moved to U.S. Such a long time and now I am back in Goa, I know that it is just for a small duration of time but I am back, I have called up all of my friends and planned a get together, All are really excited about it, And all of us have planned that we will be meeting at CCD-Miramar, We selected this point because this was where we usually passed a big part of our weekends, So everything was planned, After CCD we would go for a 6-9 show and have dinner at Marriott's ,All the reservations are done, But what surprises me is that , Neither did Dhruv receive my call nor did he call back, Dhruv is the most handsome, happening and caring boy I mean the man that I have come across till date, Actually he was our senior, but we became friends quite fast, He was our rescue ranger, any problem and we used to run to him and he used to solve it like anything, Sometimes we felt that he had some sought of magic, So I am actually waiting to meet this magic boy all over again. Here I have reached CCD, oh I am ten minutes late and I know that this people will kill me, so lets run! As I enter I can see them, They have occupied our usual spot, I must say that the interior has been changed quite a lot, As I am moving towards my group I can see all the smiles, All of us exchange our greetings and hugs, But where is Dhruv? As far as I know Dhruv, he will never want to miss a get together, He was quite particular about reunions, So I inquire about him, and just as the question left my mouth I see the facial expressions of one and all changing from that of happiness to that of surprise and then to sadness, And I am left to wonder that was has gone wrong, What has taken place that only I am ignorant of. Till three months back me and Dhruv were in regular contact, He was the one who had invited me to Goa in the first place, then what happened in this three months that I don't know? I wanted to know the truth so I asked them again and again, they tried to avoid the question but at the end they were forced to answer and they told me that Dhruv was hospitalized, I felt as if a Thunderbolt has hit me. This couldn't happen, It feels as if my throat has dried up, I want to speak but can't form any of the words, I want some one to reassure me that he is fine and had some minor injury, Dhruv wasn't just my friend he was like an elder brother to me, whom I loved very much, Just as I am going through this turmoil of emotions, one of my friend tells me that he is fine. But it looked like this was not the full truth, But for this moment that will be enough, There and then I decide that in the evening I'll go and visit Dhruv.
As I enter the hospital premises my heart beat is increasing. “This is how usually the hospital environment plays with me and this heart beat has nothing to do with Dhruv”, This is what I am trying to tell myself, With every step that I take towards Dhruv's ward I am getting more tensed, My friends have already told me that Dhruv is fine then why is it that I feel as if I wont like the sight that I will see inside? I have reached near his ward but why are my palms sweating? Why are my hands trembling as I try to open the door? Why?
At last I opened the door, but Dhruv was not to be seen at all. Yes the bed is empty and so does the room. A chill passes through my spine on the other hand I’m trying to control my nerves. Why are all sought of negative thoughts coming to my mind? It can so happen that Dhruv might have gone for a walk. Isn't it? So it will be better if I go out and search him. Just as I’m supposed to move out of the room I can here some noise. It sounds as if someone is murmuring. Suddenly I hear a screeching noise as if someone is trying to imitate a train whistle that is followed by noise that depicted a train that was in motion and then the firing of machine gun and then this sequence is repeated. Where and who is making this noise? While tracing the noise I reached the other side of the bed and what I see is more then enough to torture my mind and my soul. I can see Dhruv cuddled up like a small kid on the ground making all sought of noises. Looking at him I felt as if my knees have turned into jellies. At the next moment I find myself sitting right next to him. Though I didn’t want to cry but emotions filled my eyes with unwanted tears.
I know it! I know that it’s his new prank. This can't be true. But if this is just a prank then how come Dhruv has become so weak? What is the cause of those dark circles under his eyes? I can't think anymore, I just hugged Dhruv tightly and start repeatedly asking him “What’s wrong with you?”, but he didn’t reply. He just continues making those weird sounds and noise. He doesn't even recognize me. Now this is not possible. “Dhruv please look at me. Dhruv… Please Dhruv tell me what has happened please for heaven sake.” But he didn't reply. I am waiting for his reply with tears in my eyes and looking at him just to see if he can recognize me but he doesn't. I am totally shattered looking at him in such a state. Suddenly I happen to hear someone addressing me. It thought it could have been Dhruv's doctor. I will speak to him, he might be able to explain me Dhruv's condition. So I stood up and turned to see the Doc, but there is no one in the room leaving me and Dhruv then how come? I had indeed heard someone greeting me, I am sure about it, It wasn't my imagination at all. Now I can feel the chill in the air, as if I was having a nightmare or is this room haunted. Again I heard someone calling out to me. I am sure there is someone else in the room but why can’t I see him?

CHARACTER 2:
Hi,
Hiii!!
Look here right over here!!
Arreah Baba! Why are you so scarred as if this is a haunted room and you are about to see a ghost? Don't worry. I am not a ghost. Look I am here on your right hand side. Come close to the table. Good ... See I am right in front of you on this very table. Where? Are you asking me? Okay I am the cell phone that you can see right in front of you? What a cell phone? Yap. I am the only way through which you can know what has happened to Dhruv.
Why are you so surprised? Aah-ha! Okay this is the first time you are hearing a cell phone talk. Well usually we are not designed to talk neither was I designed so. But some times you are surrounded by so much of pain that you are forced to do things that usually are not a part of your character. Anyways, I’m Lucky. Yaa Yaa Lucky, Dhruv had named me as Lucky. I shouldn’t be talking about myself, It’s Dhruv about whom I’m suppose to talk, And yes I'll tell you each and every detail joys and sorrows, narrate to you this full episode in such a way that you will feel that it was you in place of me with Dhruv for last 3 months.
It was on 11th of October 2008, my first day at the showroom on a nice lovely central shelf. One of my batchmates had told me that our model was launched in a grand fashion and people were waiting to see us come in the showrooms. We would be sold like anything. I was the only one piece of my type left feeling all alone. I was thinking about this when I felt some ones hands on me a girls hand, wait it was not one but they were two who had removed me from the shelf at the same time a girl and a boy. Ooh I know its quite Filmy but this is what had happened on that fine day.
And the quarrel began. Well I knew both of them wanted me desperately. I swear desperately. I think that's what is called love at first sight ...ooh... I dint tell you who were the people fighting ...Those were the two people that I value the most they were Dhruv and Dhara and then after a very long discussion Dhruv bought me, and then Dhara bought one sleek and beautiful metallic pink cell, looking at which till date I miss one or two heart beats no in my case my paging signals. That’s the day when two strangers fell in love. I mean two pair of strangers fell in love and gave birth to two new love stories. Yes What I am saying is true but if I had said this on that day in front of Dhruv he would have said that I have gone crazy...But I knew it was true I had seen it in Dhara’s eyes. I had felt it in the tremor that had passed through Dhruv when he had looked in Dhara's eyes. But the fact was none of them were ready to accept the truth, and that's what actually happens, people usually don't believe in Love at first sight sort of things, but I do. We parted. I came to Dhruv's place with Dhruv and Pinky went with Dhara, but somehow I knew that we will surely meet again.
After some time, I was in Dhruv's home. Correction. My home. Dhruv was excited as he wanted to share his news with everyone NEWS---That he has bought a new cell...Do you Know what that means??...It means that I was the celebrity for the day....But what did he know that one more news was already waiting for him...A news of bigger caliber, and do you know what does this mean??....This means that I was not the celebrity for that day. The news was that Dhruv's parents had seen a nice girl for him to get married to and so they had fixed a meeting on the next day, I could really feel Dhruv's temper rising. Oh My God it busted to, Dhruv was not ready for marriage yet, but his parents didn’t want to wait. So the quarrel begins. I was wondering about how god had planned my first day at home? At the end of the quarrel my mom ...oops I mean Dhruv's mom I call her mine because she has always cared for me. So at the end of the quarrel mom and dad placed the girls snap upside down on the tip-poi and went away. After some time as Dhruv cooled down he took the snap and. Jack pot! It’s Dhara's snap. Wow I knew it. I knew it that we were supposed to meet again me and pinky. But now what?? Dhruv had already told his Mom that as of now he doesn’t want to get married and here he was continuously starring at Dhara’s snap as if it’ll disappear at the drop of his wink. And as he was staring Dad came and asked Dhruv “So what's your answer?” Look now the ball was in Dhruv's court and Dhruv answered “How can I say no to both of you? I am ready to meet the girl”. See the diplomatic way in which Dhruv tried to handle the case. But the Smile that Dad gave him back spoke volumes. So the next day we all went to officially see Dhara. The venue was supposed to be Mahalaxmi Temple. So when we reached over there Dhara's Family was already over there. Dhara wearing a beautiful pink saree looked really beautiful. When Dhara looked at Dhruv I saw the feeling of recognition in her eyes. After some introductions, small talks and the green signal from the elders it was decided that in 15 days time an Engagement party will be held and then in around December-January the wedding. Ooh such a joyous atmosphere I was happy for both of them and even for myself because now I would be able to communicate with my Pinky. As that happy moment arrived Dhruv asked Dhara for her cell number. Do you know what is coming next?? Dhruv will be calling his Dhara and I will be talking to my Pinky and from that day onwards there were incoming and outgoing calls from both the ends, and not to forget the dates. On our first date I and pinky went to CCD, and well Dhruv and Dhara had accompanied us. It was a lovely date, Dhara really looked good that day. She looked so pretty and then there was a lovely pink blush on her face and mind you it was natural, Dhara was such a shy person and such a soft spoken one that anyone would fall in love with her. She had a sweet voice; her shyness could be seen in her eyes, felt in the shivering of her hands and also in the trembling of her lips. But that day it wasn't only Dhara who was shy Dhruv was also a bit, that day I had seen a different Dhruv all together as I was facing him who was quite considerate and also caring as always. He thought twice before saying anything just because he didn’t want Dhara to feel bad. Both of them ordered the Tropical iceberg. That day was real fun. Dhruv and Dhara spoke about all different types of thinks, their likes, dislikes, passions and hobbies, they even discussed their professional life, but all in such a polite and soft spoken manner. I bet that Dhara’s profession was much more interesting then that of Dhruv’s as Dhara was a Doctor who had done her M.S in surgery. The way she spoke looked like her profession was her passion. Dhruv was a Mechanical Engineer. He was also passionate about his profession. The best think about them was that both of them respected each others profession. Dhara was a real good doctor and a wonderful person. We came to know this on our second date I remember it was on 20th October and we were suppose to go for a movie. But on the last moment we planned to go on a beach first and then to the movie, it was such a pleasant evening. The sun was setting, the sky had turned to its twilight colours, and there was soft breeze blowing, That was the first time that Dhruv had taken Dhara’s hand in his hand and they had walked quite a long distance, and they had discussed their future, planned the interior of their rooms and many more things, And then while driving towards the multiplex we saw some crowd, so both of them got down of the car, inquired about what had happened. People told them that a lady met with an accident and nobody was ready to take her to the hospital in the fear of police. At that moment Dhara requested Dhruv to take the lady to the hospital. Spoke to the respected Doctor and waited there in the hospital till the ladies family arrived. By the time it was already 9:00 p.m so Dhruv dropped her home and we came back to our place. And that day itself I was sure that Dhruv is really in Love with Dhara. After that day there were series of dates, and many get-togethers as far as families were concerned. Members from both the families mixed up as if they were a single family. They used to go for shopping together, had dinners together. And in the mean time Dhara and Dhruv had become the perfectly made for each other couple, loving each other, dreaming about each other day and night and waiting for their wedding day to come. It was on 10th November that day when both the families met once again, invitation cards pattern from both the sides was finalized and the Hall where the wedding would be held was booked, and then as usual a dinner for the celebration of finalizing all the things held, I know it sounds so funny but this exactly how both this families were—Happy Go Lucky. Enjoyed every moment to its best, over the period of time both this families had form a strong bond. Now it was decided that the final shopping for the wedding will be done at Mumbai, but before that we had to distribute the invitation cards to the invites along with some petty tasks which were supposed to be completed. So it was decided that all the family members will go to Mumbai on 22ndof Nov. by 22nd the cards were distributed, both the houses renovated, menu's finalized, reservations for Mumbai trip done almost everything was covered now only the shopping was left, and all of us were ready to go to Mumbai, But at the last moment there was a call from Dhruv's company saying that there was some sort of breakdown and so Dhruv was supposed to cancel his leave. So at the end it was decided that I and Dhruv will stay back while others go to Mumbai. As planed it was a 5 days shopping trip. Every night Dhruv used to call them and inquire about their whereabouts. From the call summary we knew that they enjoying their shopping trip. I remember it was on 26th and Dhruv was very happy and excited as these people were suppose to board the train that night and reach to Goa the next day. This would mean that he could meet Dhara all over again and spent quality time with her. He had planned to take Dhara for a candle light dinner the next day in order to express his deep thoughts of he’s not able to live without her not even a single day as he realized that Dhara is becoming an important aspect of his life line and had decided that from now onwards he wont allow Dhara to go away from him not even for a single day. Like always Dhruv called up Dhara at around 10:00p.m, we knew that they were suppose to board their train from Shatrapati Shivaji Terminus at 10:45 pm, So it wasn't surprising to hear the train whistling in the background neither the sound of the train leaving the station, We could here people shouting, the usual noise that surrounds a railway station, Mom had to literally shout and talk to Dhruv and then she gave the cell to Dhara, I always liked it when Dhara and Dhruv spoke to each other through me and pinky, I always felt that as if I am also a part of their Love and that it was the same too. The way Dhara spoke I knew that she is also waiting for the moment when she will be meeting Dhruv. She was so happy and that day it was the first time that Dhara told Dhruv that she loves him. We had seen it in her eyes but it was the first time we had heard the words. Dhruv was very happy his happiness had no bounds. Dhruv too reciprocated and told Dhara that he loves her, but even before his words would reach Dhara we heard some different noises from the other side. The noises were uncommon on a railway station. It was like someone was firing, continuously firing there were screams coming from Dhara's side, but these were life threatening screams full of pain. We dint know what was happening on other end. Dhruv was calling out to Dhara again and again but there was no reply, what we could here was only the distant whistling of train, the sound of train moving and a load firing sound continues it looked as if the firing wont stop forever and that time itself I felt a void forming in Dhruv's life, I don’t know if Dhruv knew it that time or not, but I knew that bloody firing had robbed us of everything that was dear to us.Our Family,our Love everything. I knew that at that moment itself our past, present and future all was destroyed and that to by the people that were not related to us at all. Yes that was the black day of Dhruv’s life, 26 November 2008.what right did they have to kill innocent people, destroy the life of others, what did they gain by doing all this?WHAT?
CHARACTER 1:
I did not know what to do? How to react? Or How I was suppose to answer that question that a cell had asked me, I was dumb folded, actually I was in pain. I could feel Dhruv’s pain. I could see his shattered dreams, his shattered life, I could see his tearless dry eyes which were asking me the same question why? But even I don’t have the answer, On what basis can the terrorist justify themselves and say there was a reason behind those mass killing? What are they actually trying to gain by this doings; I know that neither will you be able to answer my question, because no one can, not even the terrorist themselves. They actually don’t want to gain anything, They just want to make people loose everything that was dear to them isn’t it?

5 comments:

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  2. That was good story... A story about the kind of emotions that thousands of ppl and their relatives would have gone through on that dark night of 26/11. And the message and the question you are trying to raise with the story also carries weight... You are making the reader think about the most imp question with regards to this event : "Why ???"

    Concept-wise, its really a great concept. Just try to avoid some of the filmy stuff (which you yourself have agreed in the narration). The cell-phone doing the narration was something different... And a love-story between two cellphones, along with the 2 lead characters running parellely was something new ...

    Technically, I felt more things could be presented in the narration. Since your story is time-bound, you could have done the narration too time bound. Like this :

    11th Oct, 8.30 am

    XXXXXXX narrate XXXXXXX

    20th Oct, 2.30 pm

    XXXXXXX narrate XXXXXXX

    The narration was a bit speedy and racing through, and sometimes i got lost. You could have quoted the characters' dialogues. This lets the reader interpret easily and actually live the moments happening in the story.... More joyous moments could be described when Dhruv and Dhara meet on a first date, when they meet on the beach. The description could also be made as to describe the marriage atmosphere in the families.... MOreover, the climax of the plot, when Dhruv speaks to Dhara on their last ever call, should have been done by dialogues, which would depict the real situation. More descriiption could be given on how dhruv feels when he helplessly hears everything on phone... He wants to do something but cant help it.....

    I am just telling you the possiblities on presentation. Concept and novelty-wise, it really is a good read.

    Concept : 4/5
    Novelty : 3/5
    Presentation : 2/5

    All in all.. a very nice plot, which makes a mark on the reader, and leaves him pondering....

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  3. Keep it up.. Keep writing and looking forward for more stories from you....

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  4. Thanks Harish,your advice is always valuable and hopefully next time I'll try to avoid the loop holes ...

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